Strapped on the stretcher,
What do you do?
Hit rock bottom,
got nothing left to lose.
Staring down the long corridor,
Seeing nothing but other people staring back at me,
You know what there thinking,
Just what your thinking,
"How do you think they ended up here?"
You don't know how it started,
You don't know how it will end,
All that you know is how you wanted it to end.
Countless hours in comfy chairs,
Tasting nothing but salty tears,
This time has to be it,
The darkness inside you has to come to an end,
Life has been nothing but a never ending abyss into deeper troubles.
5 comments:
I like the opening stanza, it was good at conveying despair. The last stanza, however, doesn't match up with the "flow" of the poem before that.
Nice poem. Dark and moody. I felt the sense of hopelessness and despair.
I was blown away by this poem. Very intense. It starts out so dark, but the second to last line "The darkness inside you has to come to an end" instills an end to the hopelessness. The only place to go now is up.
My favorite stanza has to be the third one. It is an excellent frame for the rest of the poem. In a situation where there is the potential for you to feel helpless, it is good to have a sort of "this is what I want" moment. It helps in real life, and it helps this poem as well. Without it, I think the poem wouldn't have been as hopeful (and would have leaned too heavily on the sadder side)
It took me a few reads through to understand what this was about. At first, I thought it might be about some sort of accident, but then I couldnt understand the feeling of depression and wanting it all to end. Eventually I came to the conclusion that it has to be a poem about a failed suicide attempt and the accident that occurred was intentional. I liked that I had to really consider every piece of this poem as a whole, rather than dissect each line in order to find out its meaning.
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